Re: What have you written lately?
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I like that one too Mojo; although appropriating "nevermore" was a bold decision. (Or is that common? Like I said, not much poetry experience.) Given your consistent tone though, he'd approve. Let me know when the self-illustrated collection comes out, that would be awesome I bet and I'm definitely snagging a copy.
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Re: What have you written lately?
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I borrowed the word "nevermore" from Alan Parsons's The Raven. It's on his first album titled Tales of Mystery and Imagination (Edgar Allan Poe).
Illustrated...yeah...folks have been asking for that. Thanks.
Here's one I wrote on the deck yesterday as my octogenarian neighbor behind me was threatening to toss his wife over their raised deck because she wasn't disciplining their mutts properly.
Wish I had a time machine I'd fix some stuff that I have seen I'd take away pain and dismay So folks could laugh their days away.
Wish I had a time machine To learn 'bout things that haven't been I'd come right back and tell our kind Just how bad we're misaligned.
But time doesn't flow the way I think The past and future are not distinct The only time I can extol Is the now, the present, under my control.
Those moments lived and in my past They're all gone, they didn't last And those ahead, on the way Depend on what I do today.
The present then is all there is The woeful sorrow, the expansive bliss It happens right now and no machine Can take me to a different scene.
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I liked this one a lot Mojo. But I have to confess that as a science fiction fan, and a 3-beer philosopher, I got restless on the line, "The present then is all there is." But since the poem previously touched on the reason for my reaction, "And those ahead, on the way, Depend on what I do today," I went ahead and gave you an, "I get the intent and the message."
If I'm being overly literal for a poem, you gotta educate me.
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This last one resonates with everyone who's read it. It's intended to be taken literally but interpretations vary. For example, let's consider the line "And those ahead, on the way, Depend on what I do today". Some interpret this as free will and get a warm and fuzzy like you. Yet nowhere did I say that "what I do today" is my choice. Readers get defensive about the present being all there is. But taken literally, if the past is gone and the future has not yet arrived, the present really is all there is. And you saw that. Perhaps more contentiously, "The past and future are not distinct" suggests that both are on the fuzzy precipice of the "now" or time is artificial. We all know by now the reality we experience is not the fundamental reality. Time is no different. Time is nothing more than our very practical way of counting/tracking change of macroscopic events. A seemingly simple poem, that innocently spilled out of my brain and onto paper, can give one pause. For sure these thoughts have been percolating in my skull for a very long time and finally let go when I just wanted to get the hell out of the same time in which my demented neighbor resides.
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I can't write like this kind of words, such a great poems ! But I would like to share my favorite line,
"Be unique, Be you !"
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Re: What have you written lately?
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It's a good mantra. Sometimes it's difficult for people to find themselves.
Took a trip to the future Only to find A stronger me With a much tougher mind
Amidst the escarpment Tattered and scorched I saw that mankind Had pillaged and torched
I learned enough about men To make no ally loyalty was my virtue But only to I
I dished lots of mercy But not for compassion I made my own laws And got satisfaction
I tried to reason But it wasn't for goons My revolvers worked better As they blasted out tunes
I shot and I slashed To avoid being prey Dying ain't much of a living I say
Then I came back to the now No longer naive Don't matter how I die Only how I live
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