What have you written lately?
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She wanted to know Why I came this far Only to sow The seeds of war
I had good intent No hate, only love I was even hell-bent To be sweet as a dove
And then one day As I laid back I did hear her say How much she loved Jack
So I picked up my rifle And cocked its smooth lever With two shots I did stifle My evil deceiver
One day I discovered Who this Jack was Once he was mothered By the now dead lass
As I swallowed my barrel And pulled back the trigger I felt the assist Of her dead-cold finger
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Pretty interesting, I like it Mojo. The last line is wonderful. However, to put that into perspective the only other poem I understand is Jabberwocky.
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Lol. If you understand Jabberwocky, this next one won't be much of a challenge for you..
Every time I look I see but I don't find It's as if I took The life of my own mind
The dead start singing As bells are ringing For the soul I'm bringing
Two steps back I take Yet forward my mind goes The light ahead's a bright lake Yet darkness around me grows
The dead start singing As bells are ringing For the soul I'm bringing
I raise one hand And touch the ground In the strange new land My soul has found
The dead start singing As bells are ringing For the soul I'm bringing
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This one wasn't quite as obvious, but I had fun filling in the blanks and coming up with an interpretation. (I'm picturing the elevator scene from Angel Heart, except without the elevator. All-in-all, I think I like it more. (I just read it, I have to let it dwell to be sure.)
But I have to say, both are dark. If your next one is dark we're going to have to ask Axiom to turn off your ability to play any more death metal. (I've always though Axiom is like Tesla; they have back-door access to everything they sell.)
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Here's something happier for you. This one won me a poetry competition. Unbeknownst to me, apparently this poetry style is tough to pull off. Cold and uninviting is the feeling of death, Approaching your withering form now With unimaginable speed and stealth. Cold and uninviting is the feeling of death, Claiming your last breath. And you are thinking how Cold and uninviting is the feeling of death, Approaching your withering form now.
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Isn't that sweet. You feeling OK?
Enjoy the Music. Trust your ears. Laugh at Folks Who Claim to Know it All.
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Oh yeah, I feel all warm and tingly now. A definite pick me up.
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This one came to me during a colonoscopy.
Masters…nevermore
We sail Her seven seas and seed Her arid clouds. We mimic birds in flight and luminesce Her moonless night.
Deaf we’ve grown to Mother Nature’s constant warnings in anticipation of the mornings when the masters cause disasters and the sun shines all for naught. Then we’re masters…nevermore.
We split innocuous atoms and litter space and time. We juggle strings of nucleotides and dope Her sands with arsenides.
Blind we’ve grown to Mother Nature’s constant signs in anticipation of the times when the masters cause disasters and the sun shines all for naught. Then we’re masters…nevermore.
We feed the gears of industry and in Her lap belch filthy wastes. We drill her body and pump her riches and squeal in pleasure like sleazy bitches.
Insensitive we’ve grown to Mother Nature’s constant strictures in anticipation of the pictures when the masters cause disasters and the sun shines all for naught. Then we’re masters…nevermore.
Her cancer now metastasized just as we have realized our right to metabolize has vanquished and vaporized. Now we’re masters…nevermore.
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I'm glad someone can write poetry, because I sure can't.
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Charles, that's a good start. Now just 2 more lines and you'll have written a poem.
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